the distance from those brown bankrupt eyes
to the defeated brilliance
in the corner
had slammed her off from a beautiful senseless.
she saw her thoughts
reverberating throughout an echo
framed
in an illusive bridge.
[she crossed it once when she lost sight of herself]
so deepened into a composition
she wrote
softly
to loosen the strings that slit a few smiles
from a gentle secrecy.
she says she's fine
so i ask her what time her nightmare is leaving
on the train headed west
in a crush of a rain.
an understanding distorted,
her mind plateaus with a sense of surrender
it took her time to alleviate
the savvy trademarks of her soul
foolproof yesterdays
found etched in a mirage.
these complex simplicities expose her alluring
as she spirals into a clockword state
freeforming staircases among the air
i study her cry a
subtle hurricane
and find a symphony in those lush, wild eyes.














Comments
fabulous diction though!!
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Think of how stupid the average person is, and realize half of them are stupider than that.
George Carlin
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"I love when you make the dictionary your bitch."
"You seduce the English language and use it for your own sordid ends."
[JDM] [JA]
subtle hurricane
and find a symphony in those lush, wild eyes.
This line is priceless. And so beautiful in the least. <3
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the sun in the trees made the skyline look like crooked teeth.
i love the eye descriptions
fantastic job
not overwhelming...but i wouldnt call it simple
forgive me if this sounds scattered. im exhausted
~starlet
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If I can stop one heart from breaking,
I shall not live in vain;
If I can ease one life the aching,
Or cool one pain,
Or help one fainting robin
Unto his nest again,
I shall not live in vain.
--Emily Dickinson
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"I thought faeries did nice things, like grant wishes."
"Not all scars show, not all wounds heal, sometimes you can't always see the pain someone feels"
my god.
Sometimes this style get too heavy or confusing for the normal reader.
But your imagery is a beautiful portrait of words.
Well done.
From those brown bankrupt eyes to .... what time her nightmare is leaving -
beautiful.
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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
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